My Short Form Fiction In Response To: Wednesdays Visual Writing Prompt

John sat in his ragged red leather recliner, half leaning on the bulge that was now his stomach. He longed to write. He thought about the prospect day-in and day-out but reluctance kept his pen from the page, a reluctance no person on the earth would ever understand.

His hand rested uncomfortably on the journal at his knee and his fingers shook only slightly, but uncontrollably. He wanted, needed so badly to put these words to paper. Not just any words would do, they had to be perfect. It was a fact he could not escape from, no matter how much writing advice had told him otherwise. “First drafts were always crap!” they had said. But not for John, each letter was a special etching of magic, each word was the incantation of a spell.

He could feel the sweat began to bead on his brow and a wave of that heat rush quickly over him. The pen touched the paper and the black ink rolled in a zigzag fashion. John’s intake of breath was sharp and the moment seemed to freeze in time. His hand was steady now, his eyes alert, the sweat rolling down his temples dripping through his graying hair.

It had been years since he wrote last. So many long years now. The worn edges of the journal gently brushed the palm of his left hand. He held the journal open, the stain of the paper calling to him. He could still taste the tang of the warm blood filling his mouth from the last time he had been so inspired. Sometimes he could hear the faint sound of those footsteps just behind him.

Pushing the thought to the back of his mind, he traced the new tale over and over. This time would be different, the best he could manage. This was the big-ticket, a real win for a worn out framer who couldn’t walk walls let alone stand them the way that he used to. Just a stumble over fifty, this was his chance to write his life new, to pull out all the stops, to make things good again. It had to be perfect. The cramp in his right hand reminded him how long he’d been gripping the pen. The dent in his forefinger painful, he spun it around just enough to change his grip.

Clenching his teeth he let the first line flow like he had memorized. Word-for-word it spilled out, setting the scene. The old wood floors creaked in response and he rocked his feet to the rhythm. His pace did not slow, the words flowed perfectly, just as he had planned.

A waft of stale cigarette smoke reached his nose, he lifted his head to see the curtains billowing slightly from the open window. The salt air was a welcome replacement.

The floor rolled beneath him and the walls buckled with a snap. The place was settling into its new layout, cool and open.

Through the linen, on the back french doors, he could make out the rise and fall of the hills of sand that led to the beach. The sound of the crashing waves came to greet him.

His old recliner shifted comfortably with the new heartbeat of the house. He lifted the pen only for a moment to take in the scene.

This was it, it was happening, his heart skipped loudly against his chest. He could feel the weight of his aging body and so set back to writing.

With each word, he wrote away the aches and pains that four decades had wrought upon his body. A softness moved upon his skin and the corners of the paper scraped against his fading callused hands. His lungs drank deep the fresh wind wafting up from the shore and his heart quickened. It was working. Gone were the lines that marked the years about his face and the swell of his stomach – he could see it getting smaller.

It was magic that removed the years that had torn his happiness from him. With a shudder, his body settled into its newfound home. The excitement swelled within him and he knew youth again. The pen and paper fell to the floor at his feet. He hadn’t written in new clothes, he’d have to do that later after some careful thought. Writing things real was seductive but dangerous, it must be done perfectly to avoid misunderstandings. The slightest mishap could bring misery and couldn’t be undone. There was no writing away what had been writ, it was permanent.

He stood with such ease he nearly threw himself forward to the floor. His blood pumped strong through his veins. His muscles moved with a precision he hadn’t known in years. The air came swiftly to his lungs and he stretched his arms wide breathing it in. The feeling was nothing less than bliss as he walked toward the double doors, not a creak in his joints. The weight and worry of 30 years lost.

It was heaven, just like he’d planned. He’d penned every word to the letter, forgetting nothing. Gone was the single-wide trailer and mountain of bills, no health insurance and the onset of diabetes. He’d thought of it all and wrote it anew.

He was a healthy twenty-three-year-old man again, but this time with beachfront property and a swollen bank account. He was even more handsome than he had ever been and well endowed. Nothing was left to chance, and he snickered as he thought of the new Corvette awaiting him in his new driveway. It was a beautiful life, at last.

He almost giggled as he made for the back patio whose night lights had flickered aglow. The night was calling him. He would have a boat on the dock at the marina. His smile was beginning to strain the muscles in his face. The scent of lilies mixed with salt air tempted his thoughts while he listened for endless minutes to the not-so-far-off crashing of the waves.

A scraping of cement… in the background… growing louder…

He hardly noticed. It made a steady rhythm with the pounding of the waves. He was lost in the magic of his success. Until the scuffing on the patio forced his attention with a start. Had he forgotten something?

The stranger grinned in the shadows, stepping into the light to take his chance. He was at Johns side in an instant. An eight-inch dagger plunged into Johns side below his ribs. Sinking deep into his young liver.

John sputtered in shock, coughing up a trace of blood, he fought to expand his lungs. He had forgotten the stranger, the madman he had written so many years ago.

Shock struck him like a hammer. He could feel the scratch of the blade against his innards as the stranger pulled it from him. The heat of his blood filling the rear of his pants. Down he went, his knees hit hard, popping like fire as they slammed against the concrete of the patio. He blinked hard to capture the fading vision of his dream come to life, but he only caught sight of the figure. An imaginary madman of his own making which had finally undone him.

Short Form Tale In Response To:

Wednesdays Visual Writing Prompt

Try this fun tool called I Write Like to analyze your writing  🙂 For this piece it says…

MichelleRene004Published by M.R. Goodhew

Michelle Rene has been involved in the publishing industry for over twenty years as an author, copywriter, and designer, and is an Indie Author Advocate who volunteers her time to give back to the Indie Author Community.

As an author of non-fiction, Michelle Rene writes books that serve to assist the independent author in developing their platform, discovering their brand, and creating the right look that will draw readers to them. She discusses how to navigate social media and addresses marketing tactics. For the author who sets up their web presence independently and does not wish to hire a designer, her books offer a wealth of start-up information, graphic design templates, video tutorials, and give crucial insight to the designers thought process – which assists in the creation and design of the author’s platform.

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Michelle Rene also writes fiction which falls under several genres, including: Fantasy, Drama, Young-Adult Fiction, Mystery, and Thriller. She is currently working on a book that involves conspiracy theories…


10 thoughts on “My Short Form Fiction In Response To: Wednesdays Visual Writing Prompt”

  1. I did really like it. The story itself is very good. There is just something about some of the paragraphs… I’m not sure what it is, and if I knew I’d use it to fix my own writing 😉 But overall it was good.

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    1. Hi Vicki, thanks so much for taking the time to read it and for your comment. I’m writing now in response to my Wednesdays Visual Writing Prompts in an effort to improve as a writer. I don’t know that this will get to be much longer than a short story, but I appreciate the compliment for certain 🙂 I hope you voted on the polls! I hope to see you around more often 🙂


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